Sleeping Valor

This was great. =P It's amazing, but if I think about it, I can remember at least one feeling disappointment as I read through someone critiquing my grammar, which shouldn't ...

Lol! Brilliant work. Definitely long overdue. ^_^

Kadie is right about the emotions, you definitely have to be careful. Some questions you should ask yourself are: How do her parents feel about this? Is her lively behavior ...

*gasp* Three comments in the same night? For me? :D Thanks everybody! I'm glad you liked the new section. Ayra, I will definitely try to improve it with more description ...

I've hunted around, not found anything, so here's my question: If we put a story in a forum, and realize it would be better off in a different one (as ...

*bows* Thanks for reading. It's been fun. ^_^ Keek out!

^_^ I won't lie, this story didn't really start to look interesting until the very end. =P I suggested some ideas on how to fix that. I have no idea ...

Lol. Ok, so I have been taking my time with the second chapter, mainly because I have been plotting out the novel. And yes, this is going to be a ...

*count* 2 in that car, 2 in your car, 3 in our car. So that makes 7 ppl in total and any random ppls off the street. Can 7 ppl ...

(LOL! I was just working out my plot with her little mini-lesson on plotting. ^_^) Ok, at a first glance, this is depressing. I mean...she's going to die . Questions ...

Ok, so in my new story, the protagonist is playing for the bad-guys. Meanwhile, the are a bunch of 'good guys' who have been sent to deal with the trouble ...

Mt brain's a little slow, so if you want the grammar nit-pick job PM me and I'll get to it sometime soon-ish. I like your story...or rather your character. What ...

Wanda worked quickly, following Marge's instructions and not wondering where she'd learned first aid. By the time she was done, she found herself giggling; there was nothing dignified about having ...

I think what truly defines an evil character is their motivation and their actions. The most evil character to me isn't the powerful one, but the one who choses to ...

Read chapter one. I didn't find all that many mistakes. I definitely like your style and the story seems pretty interesting so far. My only real suggestion would be for ...